Meme! DVD Commentary.

[s2309]

I've been writing, but all of it is so unpolished and not worthy of being posted quite yet. I hope to post stuff soon! In the meanwhile, here, have a meme :D Code ganked from elrhiarhodan.

Go to my Masterlist (I'll update it by tonight, I promise!) (I didn't. Who's surprised?) and pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted will be very helpful).

I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track. You can ask me anything - character motivation, writing process, or if you disagree with the direction I took in a story, ask me to defend it.

Comments

[elrhiarhodan]

Please talk to me about <http://sapphire2309.livejournal.com/6881.html>She'll Be Gone - how you came up with such a unique and terrifying idea.

Peter turned his head as much as he dared to look at the time.

One eighteen.

The wings should have disappeared eighteen minutes ago.

“I thought you loved me,” Elizabeth said softly. He turned to face her.

“I do love you. More than you can imagine.”

“LIES!” she screamed, flying across the room to him. She shoved the album she’d been looking at right in front of his eyes.

Even though he couldn't see the whole thing, the white dress and decked up church were unmistakable. It was their wedding album.

“Don’t you think that a man who loved his wife like the man in that picture would be able to do something as simple as coming home on time? To hold his wife, tell her how his day went, keep her grounded?”

Peter blinked. He remembered that, from one of their conversations late on a Thursday night.

“Why do you want me to hold you?”

“Your arms keep me grounded. They keep me from flying away, when the wings are just aching to test the skies. If you weren’t holding me, if Mother hadn’t held me, I could be weightless for all that I could do against the wings. I’d probably go flying off into the night. I did once.”

She was barely an arm's distance from him, standing in the air.

He lunged, wrapping his arms around her shoulders and pulling her towards the ground. He made sure that they landed on his back, not her wings. He didn’t know how much that would hurt, but a ballpark figure of ‘a hell of a lot’ probably wasn’t an exaggeration.

[sapphire2309]

I think this fic was born out of desperation, really. I needed something for the wings square on my hc bingo card last year, and all I knew about wingfic was that you gave people wings. When I wrote this fic, I had no idea about backstory, but now, I have stories about these wingfolk from before, when their wings weren't a curse, and I'm not sure exactly how they became what they did, but I'm sure there was a lot of angst involved.

I think part of this fic probably came from the fact that I was completely obsessed with Cinderella by Steven Curtis Chapman, in particular the lines But all too soon, the clock will strike midnight/And she'll be gone. While writing this, I took 'gone' in a different sense than was intended in the lyric (the song's called Cinderella, that should tell you everything :P) and somehow threw wings into the mix, and just tossed words onto the page and generally had fun. Yes, my idea of fun is angst and horror. Don't let that scare you. :P

Achhh, "keep her grounded?" was *such* an obviously leading question that I wanted to change it, but by the time I caught it, too many people had read the fic already. I figure that some part of Elizabeth probably fought the mental haze brought on by the wings and wanted to get back into herself.

I imagine that the wings would be painful because they aren't a natural part of the human body. Like, they somehow grew, and since there wasn't a specific place for them to grow from, they broke skin. And considering they essentially regrow every week (I'm not sure what I was thinking when I made them like that) they're going to be painful when they've just sprouted? Is that the right word? Anyhow. So yeah. I'm very logical like that.

[aragarna.livejournal.com]

Damn I wanted She'll Be Gone too!

[sapphire2309]

You could always quote another part *g*

[aragarna.livejournal.com]

I don't know... I think I just particularly like this line:
He’d take the wings if it meant always having and holding this beautiful woman in his arms.
Because it tells so much how deep is Peter's love for El. And what I really loved about your story is that it remains very true to their feelings in canon.

[sapphire2309]

Awww, thank you! I really do believe that Peter would fight his way through anything for El. And she'd do the same. They're amazing like that :3